Peer Editing Feedback
(Jessica)
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why? None, she told her story play for play. Maybe a better description of her cat ( what does it look like, what kind of cat is it?

2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Facts about cats, yes it makes you want to hear more about what she has to say

3. Do the first 450 words contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work. Yes, her getting home from work, and smelling something and finding cat poop in her bed.

4. What questions would you like answered in the next 300 words? What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
What kind of cat she had, how old her cat is, maybe research a reason her cat might have pooped in her bed for example it wants attention etc.

Peer Editing Feedback
(brooke)
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
It is pretty well written out, maybe give more details about the boys themselves.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Yes, you want to learn if there really is a disease for being an extreme celeb fan. More Jonas Brother Fans
3. Do the first 450 words contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work. Yes, they drove to detriot to see the jonas brothers.

4. What questions would you like answered in the next 300 words? What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
More about the Jonas Brothers, their names, ages, what got them into singing, how old were they when they started..etc..